The shattered life

Category: Writers Block

Post 1 by God's Child (Generic Zoner) on Saturday, 15-Apr-2006 0:10:06

I've seen it before, wondering in the frailness of time. One life, one reason, one chance to prove that one can survive
It was said of mannhy that he would never know, it was said of few hewould never go.
But the night he tried andoh did he try,to not die and still survive.
The tribulum fell upon him and tested and tried,
deep inside his mind he went not willing to die.
BUt still it pressed on till he could stand no more and out of despair, he lost the war.
Wondering the streets, he saw a lost gun. He cried out to the heavens, and began to run.
Reaching the hidden place upon the muntains high,
the old man pooled the trigger, andhis wisdom died.
So thsi is the end of a tale of sad cries,
for there is a message hidden deep with in that shattered life.

Post 2 by DixieGirl (I can't call it a day til I enter the zone BBS) on Saturday, 15-Apr-2006 8:50:29

great writing, which you knew that--didn't you? I don't have to tell you. Combine the singing and the writing, it would go well. Hugs to you,
In Him,
Shand
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Post 3 by God's Child (Generic Zoner) on Saturday, 15-Apr-2006 16:36:19

I have done some of that.

Post 4 by dissonance (Help me, I'm stuck to my chair!) on Saturday, 22-Apr-2006 0:08:06

Darrel that's amazing!!!! Powerful, great rhyme skeme, profound, admirable.

Post 5 by God's Child (Generic Zoner) on Saturday, 22-Apr-2006 11:23:39

The question is: Do you understand it?